Talk:Oil Industry Under Gaddafi

Generally- could you just leave one line of space between bottom of text and new subheading?

According to one widely accepted analysis, - by who? SORTED. QUOTED AS SUCH IN SOURCE BUT REWORDED.

-"based on the Nasserite Constitutional model. " - which is..? BIT MORE DETAIL ADDED AND SOURCE.

-"Al-Baida Gaddhafi declared in a speech" - sorry for sounding silly, but isn't Al-Baida a place? Or the name of a Gaddafi family member? Or a nickname for Muammar? YOU ARE SO RIGHT.

-"Libya nationalised the holdings of British Petroleum (BP)" - which were...? NECESSARY?

-"In 1973, Libya announced the nationalization of oil major Hunt's assets in retaliation for US support of Israel," - where were the assets, how much, etc? could potentially be a link to an oil field or another article.. HAD A LOOK AND CAN'T FIND VALUES, BUT HAVE A FIELD AND LINK NOW.

-"The Oasis Group also signed a similar agreement (affecting Continental, Amerada, Marathon and Shell). " - guessing you mean Occidental? NO NO, OCCIDENTAL BECAME CONOCOPHILLIPS, SO WILL PUT AN INTERNAL LINK TO CONOCO AND MAKE SURE PROFILE MAKES THAT CLEAR.

-". By 1975 the assets of almost all companies working in Libya were either fully nationalized (such as BP) or majority owned by the Libyan State, who held a 63% of German Wintershall, 85% of Austrian OMV, 59.2% of the Oasis Group and 50% of Italian Agip"

-for someone reading it quickly it looks a bit like the Libyan State held 63% of German Wintershall - without mentioning assets... etc- could you make it a bit clearer? CLARIFIED.

-"These moves were widely interpreted as Gaddhafi using oil resources as a political weapon." - subjective! interpreted by whom? SORTED WITH NAMED REFERENCE.

-"He proposed a 'United States of Africa', the concept of which later formed the basis of the African Union.[14]" - what happened to his proposal? SORTED.

-"Gaddhafi's confrontational and often erratic foreign policies," - such as..? or, according to? HAVE TWEAKED.

-"After the regime was implicated in the bombing of a Berlin disco frequented by American military personnel, " - date of bombing? DONE.

-"In 1987, reacting to the generally deplorable state of domestic affairs" - deplorable=subjective! according to? SORTED.

-". Efforts at industrial reform outside the petrochemical sector under Gaddhafi yielded little progress" - not sure but if you count the great man-made river amongst those some would say that is progress... HMMMM JUST GOING OFF BITELSMANN SOURCE, BUT CAN WORD DIFFERENTLY??

-"Industry experts did not dismiss the possibility, however saw the threat as a tactical move aimed at leveraging the expected renegotiation of existing contracts with IOCs " - could you spell out IOCs - and the sentence is missing a word I think? IOCs SPELLED OUT PREVIOUSLY IN ARTICLE & CAN'T FIND THE MISSING WORD....

JOHNNY COMMENTS: WE DON'T HAVE AN ARTICLE ON HUNT TO LINK TO. OTHER COMMENTS SHOULD HAVE BEEN DEALT WITH.

PS JOHNNY'S RESPECTFUL COMMENT ON GHANEM MADE ME SPURT MY TEA OUT WITH LAUGHTER.